My Enemy

aikoden

♥DREAMER♥
Staff member
just happen to finish my sample... i couldn't find some ideas that would make the two (rome+aff). since the title and the prologue sounds more revengeful, this is the only concept i have in my mind...


hope you like it... ;)
keke hot xp lol.. ahhhhhhhhhhh should i read this first or 2NAW .. ahhhhhhhhh .. hmmm i guess i shall read 2NAW first keke cause its finished n so i wouldnt have to wait kekek gosh so many fics to go through lol.. xp..
 

Dajaja

sarNie Egg
OMG.... sugar mom???? LOOOOL......... :loool:

i'm assuming you mean the female version of the 'SUGAR DADDY'??

WHOA... (if that's the case). :p So Patta is gonna be a toyboy!?? :dude:
 

sarN

sarNie Granny
Patta wasn't sure what his mother meant by the word "sugar mom?"

"its the only way to get fast money and lots of them listen. These old hi-class women are bunch of selfish bitches. They are like your father's wives"

"b..but mother Rosa love me dearly"

"no!!! she love you because she didn't know the truth !!!..if she know you're my son , trust me ..she will hate you hate you , like she hate me"

"mother Rosa had always protect me, she ---"

"isten !!! She force me to drink red medicine so you will die in my stomach ! That bitch raise you as her own because she didn't know her own son die at birth ! All those bitches and bastard is our enemy, you seen how they torture me and the scarf on my face will remind us"

"I..I..still think mother Rosa love me regardless"

"o' I see where this is going . You still want to goes back to those family and leave me to rotten?!! Is that it !"

"no no..no"

"Patta !!! Im your real mother. I suffer for 16 years!! They treat me as if im not human . You father rape me and stole you from my arm . That bastard even hate you, his own flesh in blood because he ashame , ashame of having a son with an servant girl like me. You must help me ...help me revenge them . Let them suffer ...suffer"

Patta was in tear while listening to his mother cries out for revenge and he grow bitter as she describe in detail what his father had done to her . He despise his father even more and Saipoon was please to see the sudden change in her son expression . She want him to grown up with hatred and thrive for revenge.

"yes. mom ..i'll do anything for you"

Saipoon smile and embrace him "that's my son"

The next several weeks they manage their budget wisely by eating one time a day, avoid using light during the day time and water was fetch from the main stream . Life was hard for Patta , since he was use to live in luxury and surrounded by servant !! His mother kept bringing up the topic of being a male escort but he would avoid the conversation by changing the subject. Saipoon know that her son isn't completely under her guide and she often saw him crying at night . She wasn't sure was it because he not use to living in poverty or something else ? Patta is a good son but he is to fragile and Saipoon doesn't like the weakness in him . She want to change him, turn him into something more rough.

In the slum there all type of people and everyday there fights between neighbors. Woman caught their husband cheating is often the case in the slum and other are gambling , sexual harassment , gang related, bickering among seller and buyer or loan sharp causing problem for their debtor . Patta wasn't use to the real world and often get pick on by the neighbors , who call him rich kid , sissy , pretty boy and most of the time he would avoid them because he was always taught to be civilize .Saipoon was aware of this and doesn't like it . How can he revenge his enemy with this kind of behavior? Saipoon decided to make friend with a prostitute living next door, her name was Lucy .

Lucy is very well known in the slum for being a loud mouth with a bitchy personality, 30 years old and became a prostitute after she ran away from home when she was 16. Lucy had a crush on Patta and was please everytime Saipoon visit her , hoping she can get on Saipoon good side ...then perhaps Patta too.

"I need your help"

"anything ma"

"i know you like my son"

"yes ..i do . he very adorable"

"how much would you charge me if ..i ask you to tutor my son about..sex"

"ma!!! are you serious !!?"

"im very serious "

"free !!!! I'll do it for free!!!"

Saipoon smile devious and tell Lucy to be home later on tonight. Then she went home and tell her son about Lucy but Patta refuse !! He was young and wasn't ready to have a wife or a woman !!Saipoon scorn at him !! Tell him it's the only way he will become a man and take on bigger role in the future. Don't forget about their revenge she would said . Patta shake his head violently not wanting to sleep with Lucy but Saipoon call him a bad son !!

"damn you !! Im your mother ! I suffer far worth than that with your father ! You have to do it . If you don't we are through"

"no no mom ..I..I'll do it "

Just as plan Lucy came over later that night and went into Patta's room . Lucy was excited because it the first time she slept with a younger guy because most of her customer is dirty old man !! Patta was nervous and ball himself in the corner as Lucy crawl on four toward him. The deed was done when Saipoon close the light in his room and silently left the house to grab some late night desert . She was celebrating first step of revenge and so far everything is going as plan . She want to create a sinner and that sinner will be her son ...the prefect pawn in her game.
 

nikki1786

LizQuen
i cant believe her revenge start with NOT SO NICE.... tsk tsk tsk (i'll give my application letter to Saipoon for hiring SUGAR MOM) kiddin~! :lol:
 

tastesweetlove

sarNie Granny
gasp...poor patta.....i wanted to be his FIRST hmph....not some 30-year-old lady..what if she is not clean? =O noooooo...saipoon's revenge is so scary....i would never want to cross her (unless i can get patta).....what a guilt trip
 

chenling

sarNie Adult
whoaaaa she's pretty much using her son, man thats low. I feel bad for him....some fantastic updates sarn...can't wait for more!
 

M. Malia

sarNie Egg
This is a wrong way for revenge. Another thing if the main character is Rome/Aff, they would be sibling correct? Same father means you're definately same blood. Just curious. Awesome story line thought.
 

nikki1786

LizQuen
This is a wrong way for revenge. Another thing if the main character is Rome/Aff, they would be sibling correct? Same father means you're definately same blood. Just curious. Awesome story line thought.


that's what im thinking too... INCEST... maybe there's a twist on it....
 

alby

sarNie Hatchling
Well I felt bad for Saipoon in the beginning, but now I see I shouldn't have, she is turning into a bitch. She is not a good mother, Rosa is a way better mother figure than Saipoon. Dam her for pimping out her own son, what selfish bitch.
 

lady0fdarkness

Professional Lakorn Watcher
Well I felt bad for Saipoon in the beginning, but now I see I shouldn't have, she is turning into a bitch. She is not a good mother, Rosa is a way better mother figure than Saipoon. Dam her for pimping out her own son, what selfish bitch.
That is exactly how I feel! At first, I felt so sorry for her, but.. I guess she hates Mr. Taksarn and his bitches more than she loves her son. Hate can totally blind a person,I guess.
 

sarN

sarNie Granny
Meanwhile back in Chiang Mai, the wives was thrill to found out Saipoon had left the house and they thought because of their cruelness but nobody know what happen to Patta except Mr.Taksorn but he kept his mouth shut and goes on with his daily work. Rosa waited several days until she decided to report to the police! She was heart broken and cry every night , wondering where her son is. Mr. Taksorn was aware of his wife health ever since the disappearing of Patta but he refuse to reveal the truth that Patta had left the house with Saipoon because he fear it will only make Rosa worst if she question the story more , it might lead him to confess that Patta isn't her real son. As weeks turn to months , Rosa became mentally sick in bed. She cry out her son name and talk to herself as if he was here. The doctor no longer can cure her disease beside giving her vitamin to nurture her body. Rosa was in grief thinking her son had die or probable run away from home , everyday she stand by the window in her room and look down while muttering his name over and over like a crazy person . At night she would scream and cry out, making everyone wake up to see her. The other two wives grow annoyance and demand Mr.Taksorn to move her to the back house!!

"she insane !!! let her stay in the little house !!"said Palin

"Rosa is just sick"? said Mr.Taksorn

"it been years !!! what if one day she gone mad and kill us all!!! You have to move her to the little house"said Kaping

Mr.Taksorn was force to relocate Rosa from the main house though he hesitated but it for the best because Rosa became more violent by the day throwing everything in sight. Out of all his wives, he loved Rosa the most because she was his first girlfriend and he pity her so dearly. If Patta was to return back , he will look past all the negative tension between them and let him stay in the house for Rosa sake but years gone by like a breeze with no sign of his son. Mr. Taksorn begin to think Saipoon and Patta had start a new life together and won't be coming back . He decided to erase Patta's name from his will and replace it with his favorite daughter Aff.

Mr. Taksorn spoil her with anything she desire. Little Aff was her dad jester, when ever he stress because of work she would come into his office and make him laugh with her comic nature . She was lively , witty and adorable . She was love by everyone in the house even her step-mom Palin found the little girl delightful than her own daughter. When Aff finish middle school her father send her to Bankok to attend high school there and he never miss any of her school event . During the weekend and summer she return to Chiang Mai to be with her family.

"daddy !! Don't forget to come to my graduation next month" Aff exclaimed thru the phone.

"I wouldn't miss it for the world"

Mr.Taksorn hang up with a smile and told the servant to get the house ready for a welcome home party. She graduating from high school next month and soon will be helping him with the family business.

It been 14 years that Patta left Chiang Mai and soon he will return to claim what is his , plus interest. Over the years he made wave in dark side of passion with women in the hi-class world. He was handsome , charming , exciting and ..expensive!! Man despise him but rich old woman adore him because he know how to pleasure them and those women get it all ..with a price .
 

tastesweetlove

sarNie Granny
brb with me ...my dad need to use the computer ....
OK


aww...i kind of feel bad for rosa but it's karma........awww aff loved by her father...OoOo having a welcome home party^^

It been ….14 years that Patta left Chiang Mai and soon he will return to claim what is his …plus interest. Over the years he made wave in dark side of passion with women in the hi-class world. He was handsome , charming , exciting and ..expensive…!! Man despise him but rich old woman adore him because he know how to pleasure them …and those women get it all ..with a price .
:loool: i would pay too....i just can't wait for him to come back :drool:
 

lady0fdarkness

Professional Lakorn Watcher
It's so ironic how I used to hate Rosa, but mow.. I feel so bad for her.. I feel more sympathy for her more than Saipoon now.

Sighh.
 
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